rcolley Posted February 1, 2009 Author Share Posted February 1, 2009 You're lucky.I used to HATE public speaking, so much. Especially when it came to speaking in front of the entire grade. , it depends which class i'm in because I can speak out to my performing arts class because we have all been through that stage of not being able to talk infront of the class but with the rest of my classes i'm still a bit cautious. Sorry i'm not that good at explaining things. . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
virysya Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Overall it sounds quite good, but especially sentences like "Some people do discriminate us Green Day fans just because we like Green Day" are a bit over the top. Maybe right, but you sound like the poor poor poor Green Day fan, who hasn't a good live because people discriminate him.agreed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Agija Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 I wish I could do a public speech about Green Day, but I always have to talk about boring things.Anyway, I think the ending's good enough. And if you consider the pieces of advice you've been given, it will great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NickD Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 You use "Green Day" WAY too much, as someone has mentioned. It's not the best of grammar, either, if it's for an English paper. But it's not too bad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IHateYou Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Well, I hope your teacher doesn't dislike Green Day. I also hope that she enjoys speeches about nothing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
IscoredWaddlesgoals Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Maybe put something like:Unfortunately for the rest of my family, I don't plan to stop listening to them and enjoying their music. My life would be very different without their influence. Although some people may disagree and even tease me, I think Green Day are one of the most talented rock bands in the world and I wear my t-shirts with pride. Sorry if I sound picky or anything, your original speech is good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Radioactive1 Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Maybe put something like:Unfortunately for the rest of my family, I don't plan to stop listening to them and enjoying their music. My life would be very different without their influence. Although some people may disagree and even tease me, I think Green Day are one of the most talented rock bands in the world and I wear my t-shirts with pride. Sorry if I sound picky or anything, your original speech is good.I agree with this. Your original speech is good but very muddled. It needs re-wording, especially if it's for an english paper. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Hayley Posted February 1, 2009 Share Posted February 1, 2009 Maybe don't say "I plan on liking Green Day..." because then it sounds like a very concious, methodical kind of thing. Maybe replace it with some more along the lines of "I know I'll like Green Day for a long time" etc etc.Otherwise, I agree with what's already been said about the "just because we like Green Day" thing. Other than that, this is excellent that's true...it's nice though good job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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